class work Sep. 30th

9/30/14 classwork
http://www.sunyjefferson.edu/node/1214

•   It is his own work as he writes it from his personal perspective..."I can attest to this military-civilian divide through my own experience as a soldier"
• The paper consists of 4000 words which is within the 3000+ word length not counting the works cited page.
• The paper fit MLA format in its original form, it has correct grammar except one location "Ultimately, the absence of a draft and the resulting lack of national unity and support have lead to a serious decrease in our troop levels." where lead should have been led in this particular case.
• There ware well done works cited page

Bandow, Doug. “National Service: Unnecessary and unAmerican.” Orbis 34.3 (Summer 1990): 371–385. Military & Government Collection. Web. 3 July 2009.

Brimley, Shawn. “Crafting Strategy in an Age of Transition.” Parameters: U.S. Army War College 38.4 (Winter 2008): 27–42. Military & Government Collection. Web. 2 July 2009.

• Contained parenthetical citations and copious signal phrases that are to standard.
  " Immediately preceding the calamitous events of 9/11, Robert Putnam, political scientist and professor of public policy at Harvard University, wrote a book aboutthe American lack of social cohesion (Grigsby 111)."
• He argued his thesis by opening with his statement,
  Thesis: “Compulsory conscription needs reinstating to reestablish true American citizenship and

national unification of the people, thereby resulting in the expansion of U.S. troops and increased 

homeland security.”

   Examples of arguing their thesis: 

“Furthermore, those who oppose the draft feel that in a free society, the choice to serve or not to serve 

in the military is a constitutional right, and mandatory military service is an infringement upon this 

right.”

“Moreover, draft opponents contend that compulsory national service will be too costly for an already 

severely economically challenged United States.”

“Ultimately, the absence of a draft and the resulting lack of national unity and support have led to a 

serious decrease in our troop levels.”

"Very shortly, this may no longer be the case, as freedom needs continuous protection made difficult by a war-torn and depleted army. Unfortunately, the low number of American military forces threatens the freedom of American society."

• He provides both sides to the argument, then giving his description on why he thinks the way he does given this information.
• Contains 5 peer reviewed sources. 

Credible Peer Review / Journal Articles:
1. Galston, William. “Should the All Volunteer Force Be Replaced by Universal Mandatory National Service? Pro.” Congressional Digest 85.7 (Sep. 2006): 208–220. Military & Government Collection. Web. 2 July 2009.
2. Rangel, Charles. “Should the All Volunteer Force Be Replaced by Universal Mandatory National Service? Pro.” Congressional Digest 85.7 (Sep. 2006): 206–208. Military & Government Collection. Web. 2 July 2009.

3. Kestnbaum, Meyer. “Citizenship and Compulsory Military Service: The Revolutionary Origins of Conscription in the United States.“ Armed Forces & Society (Transaction Publishers) 27.1 (Fall 2000): 7–36. Academic Search Premier. Web. 2 July 2009.

4. Grigsby, Carol A. “Binding the Nation: National Service in America. (Spanish).” Parameters: U.S. Army War College 38.4 (Winter 2008): 109–123.Military & Government Collection. Web. 2 July 2009.

5. Bandow, Doug. “National Service: Unnecessary and unAmerican.” Orbis 34.3 (Summer 1990): 371–385. Military & Government Collection. Web. 3 July 2009. 

• He demonstrated all of the requirements in a well rounded and good sounding paper. Overall grade that my group would give this paper is a "B". We chose this grade because he was very "jumpy" and often overly emotional. The chosen audience is hard to determine by the way he writes. He was also biased towards one side of the argument, which is displayed in his counterargument sections.